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What Can You Do to Fix 'Flat' Writing?

9/26/2012

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Flat writing REPELS agents, managers and producers.

It’s a huge issue in amateur scripts, and shows up in TV and movies all the time too.

And there’s nothing more frustrating than getting the note that your own writing is ‘flat.’ 

The word stings. It feels somehow personal. Like you’re just a boring writer with nothing to say. 

But today we’re going to show you how to defeat flat writing once and for all...


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What Do You Mean By Flat?

One of the most frustrating things about hearing that your writing is flat, is that flat writing hasn’t ever really been defined.

It’s like hearing that your work is “missing that certain something.” Thanks. But could you be a little more specific?

First… The Good News.

If your writing is flat or ‘missing that certain something,’ you can be sure that there’s a lot that you’ve done right.

Your reader isn’t getting tripped up over your plot. They would have mentioned that. The script isn’t poorly written or formatted. That gets mentioned too.

What we find is that flat writing is almost always an indicator of a lack of CONFLICT.

Once you up the conflict in your scenes, everything else will come to life. Characters will shine. Your theme will become clear. All the invisible indicators of flat writing will begin to wash away.

How Conflict Works

Being told to ‘add conflict’ to your screenplay can sometimes be just as confusing as being told that your writing is flat.

Here's one great way to up the conflict: In flat scenes, trying having one character convince another character of something. The resulting argument will often lift the scene out of the muck.

We call this the “Convince Me Covenant.” Commit it to memory and it will soon become your go to technique for saving sagging scenes.

Now that’s not to say there always has to be a HUGE argument happening on screen, or any argument at all (movies are after all a visual medium). 


Argument is just one way to capture and demonstrate conflict, which is at the heart of fixing flat writing. And if you're going to have any sort of decision being made through dialogue, you'll often find that an argument over that decision will unlock the scene in a whole new way.

When two people are arguing, the audience is naturally engaged. It almost doesn’t even matter what they’re arguing about.
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Think about life in general. When you overhear a couple bickering at dinner, don’t your ears perk up? 

You have no reason to care who wins that argument. But the people arguing do. And their commitment to the argument brings you right into their world. You feel the stakes, even though they don't involve you at all.

Reality TV subsists almost entirely on this idea alone. Tons of meaningless arguments that are interesting for no other reason than the people arguing seem to care. 

Spike Lee takes all this to a new level. Check out the following clip from “Do The Right Thing.”    

The scene starts off with a trivial argument about baseball pitchers. But immediately, I’m hooked. And it doesn’t stop there.

Then Buggin’ Out approaches and engages Spike in another argument.

“You da man.”

“No you da man.”

And I’m still hooked.

Finally, the scene concludes with an argument over Buggin Out’s scuffed sneakers. And everyone’s arguing. All the way through.

Spike Lee uses these simple arguments to explore all of the themes of violence and race in the movie, and even manages to foreshadow the ending at the same time. 


But if the conflict wasn't there, no one would be watching.

By they way, Buggin Out? That “You da man” guy? The one in yellow? I bet you didn’t realize who he was…

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And you thought he was a great actor BEFORE reading this article...

Here's How to Use the "Convince Me Covenant" to Improve Your Screenwriting

1)   Start paying attention. “The Convince Me Covenant” is in all your favorite movies. Often it will be more subtle than the example above, especially in non dialogue-driven genres, but it’s there.

2)   Comb through the script you’re writing now. Add conflict whenever possible. This can come in the form of an argument, or more obstacles in a chase scene, what have you. Maximize conflict for optimal results.

3)   Plan ahead. For future scripts, think about where you’re going to get conflict from. If you have characters that are juxtaposed in some way, you’ll be set up for success.

4)   Where else have you seen this technique used successfully? How about not so successfully? Comment below.


4 Comments
pablo
9/26/2012 05:50:07 am

"Breaking Bad" The odd couple relationship between Walter White [Bryan Cranston] and Jesse Pinkman [Aaron Paul] is one non-stop argument. They are always at cross-purposes, always disagreeing about everything. In every scene in every episode. It's the sin qua non that has kept their relationship interesting for an audience through five seasons. (And they've got the Emmy's and ratings to prove it.)

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A. D. Campbell
10/1/2012 05:39:35 am

My favorite argument scene is between Will and Skylar in "Good Will Hunting" when they break up in her room.

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10/11/2012 08:56:08 am

Tons of great conflict in that movie - - it's one of my favorites!

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